Exchange draft emails (from Exercise 23) with other students in class (so that you’re not revising the paper of the person who is revising yours). Using the process described in Exercise 23, revise the other student’s message, and then return the draft to the writer with your suggestions.

Exercise 23

Revise your draft email to the student organization. What changes will you make to improve the message? Follow these steps for the revision process:

a. Read the email once, revising for content. Make sure that all needed information—and no unnecessary information—is included for the audience. Check the sequencing.

b. Read the email a second time, revising for style. Make sure that the words, sentences, paragraphs, and overall tone are appropriate. How might the readers react?

c. Read the email a third time, revising for correctness. Make sure that grammar, punctuation, and word choice are error free.