Louise and Paul work for the same manufacturing company. Louise, a senior engineer, is chairing a committee to investigate ways to improve the hiring process at the company. Paul, a technical editor, also serves on the committee. The excerpts quoted in Louise’s e-mail are from an e-mail written by Paul to all members of the committee in response to Louise’s request that members describe their approach to evaluating job-application materials. How would you revise Louise’s e-mail to make it more effective?

To: Paul From: Louise Sometimes I just have to wonder what you’re thinking, Paul.

>Of course, it’s not possible to expect perfect

>resumes. But I have to screen them, and

>last year I had to read over 200.

I’m not looking for

>perfection, but as soon as I spot an error I make

>a mental note of it and when I hit a second and

>then a third error I can’t concentrate on the

>writer’s credentials.

Listen, Paul, you might be a sharp editor, but the rest of us have a different responsibility: to make the products and move them out as soon as possible. We don’t have the luxury of studying documents to see if we can find errors. I suggest you concentrate on what you were hired to do, without imposing your “standards” on the rest of us. >From my point of view, an error can include a >misused trademark. Misusing a “trademark,” Paul? Is that Error Number 1?