Lexie Tsuneshi has the right idea in sending a follow-up message after her interview for a marketing coordinator position in Bloomington, Indiana. However, her message could be more effective.

Your Task.

Based on what you have learned in this chapter, in teams or in a class discussion, list at least five weaknesses. Look for problems with punctuation, wordiness, proofreading, capitalization, sentence structure, and other writing techniques you have studied.

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415 South Cory Lane Sunny Slopes, IN 47401 June 14, 2022 Mr. Jared M. Rogers Rasmussen Marketing 3205 East Covenanter Drive Bloomington, IN 47402 Dear Mr. Rogers: It was an exceeding pleasure and thrill to talk with you about the open position at Rasmussen Marketing. The position as you presented it seems to be a exceptional match for my marketing training and skills. The visionary approach to Account Management that you described, strengthened my resolve to work in a imaginative firm such as Rasmusen Marketing. I would bring to the position strong organizational skills, and I have the ability to encourage others to work cooperatively within the department. My training in research and analysis of quantitative and qualitative data; as well as my experience as a marketing intern would enable me to help with the updating and management of the CRM system that you mentioned. I certainly understand your departments need for strong support in the administrative area. I am definitely attentive to details and my organizational skills will help to liberate you to attend to more serious issues in the marketing arena. I was remiss in failing to mention during our very intriguing interview that I also have a minor in marketing despite the fact that it was on my rsum. Thanks for giving me a chunk of your valuable time to interview me, and explain the goals of your agency along with the dutys of this position. As I am sure you noticed during the interview I am very interested in working for Rasmussen Market- ing because I need to get a well-paying job to afford expensive rent and start paying off student loans; and look forward to hearing from you about this position. In the event that you might perhaps want additional info from me or facts about me, all you need to do is text me. Sincerely, Lexie Tsuneshi Lexie Tsuneshi