The following cover letter accompanies Isabella Jimenez's rsum (Radical Rewrite 13.1). Like her rsum, the cover letter

The following cover letter accompanies Isabella Jimenez's résumé (Radical Rewrite 13.1). Like her résumé, the cover letter needs major revision.

Data From (Radical Rewrite 13.1)

The following poorly organized and written résumé needs help to remedy its misspellings, typos, and inconsistent headings.

Your Task. Analyze Isabella’s sad résumé. List at least eight weaknesses. Your instructor may ask you to revise sections of this résumé before showing you an improved version.

Your Task. Analyze Isabella's cover letter and list at least eight weaknesses. Your instructor may ask you to revise this letter before showing you an improved version.
To Whom It May Concern:
I saw your internship position yesterday and would like to apply right away. It would be so exiting to work for your esteemed firm! An internship would really give me much needed real-world experience and help my career.
I have all the qualifications you require in your add and more. I am a junior at Colorado State University-Pueblo and an Accounting major (with a minor in Finance). Accounting and Finance are my passion and I want to become a CPA and a financial advisor. I have taken Intermediate I and II and now work as a financial advisor with Primerica Financial Services in Pueblo. I should also tell you that I was at Target for four years. I learned alot, but my heart is in accounting and finance.
I am a team player, a born leader, motivated, reliable, and I show excellent composure in stressful situation, for example, when customers complain. I put myself through school and always carry at least 15 units while working part time.

You will probably agree that I am a good candidate for your internship position, which should start July 1. I feel that my motivation, passion, and strong people skills will serve your company well.

Sincerely, 

List at least eight weaknesses.

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OBJECTIVE I'm dying to land a first job in the "real world" with a big profitable company that will help me get ahead in the accounting field. SKILLS Word processing, Internet browsers (Explorer and Google), Powerpoint, Excel, type 40 wpm, databases, spreadsheets; great compo- sure in stressful situations; 3 years as leader and supervisor and 4 years in customer service EDUCATION Résumé of Isabella R. Jimenez 1340 East Phillips Ave., Apt. D Littleton, CO 80126 Phone 455-5182. E-Mail: Hotchilibabe@gmail.com Arapahoe Community College, Littleton, Colorado. AA degree Fall 2013 Now I am pursuing a BA in Accounting at CSU-Pueblo, majoring in Accounting; my minor is Finance. My expected degree date is June 2015; I recieved a Certificate of Completion in Entry Level Accounting in December 2012. I graduated East High School, Denver, CO in 2009. Highlights: Named Line Manger of the Month at Target, 08/2009 and 09/2010 • Obtained a Certificate in Entry Level Accounting, June 2012 • Chair of Accounting Society, Spring and fall 2013 • Dean's Honor List, Fall 2014 . Financial advisor training completed through Primerica (May 2014) • Webmaster for M.E.Ch.A, Spring 2015 Part-Time Employment Financial Consultant, 2014 to present I worked only part-time (January 2014-present) for Primerica Financial Services, Pueblo, CO to assist clients in refinancing a mortgage or consolidating a current mortgage loan and also to advice clients in assessing their need for life insurance. Target, Littleton, CO. As line manager, from September 2008-March 2012, I supervised 22 cashiers and front-end associates. I helped to write schedules, disciplinary action notices, and performance appraisals. I also kept track of change drawer and money exchanges; occasionally was manager on duty for entire store. Mr. K's Floral Design of Denver. I taught flower design from August, 2008 to September, 2009. I supervised 5 florists, made floral arrangements for big events like weddings, send them to customers, and restocked flowers. List at least eight weaknesses.