The following e-mail message from Kennedy Freed asks his assistant Camille Chavez to perform a task. However, she will struggle with that task because the message is so poorly written. It badly needs a radical rewrite.

Your Task. Study the message in light of what you have learned about how e-mail messages should be organized. What is Camille to do? Should this message have an end date? List at least five weaknesses of this message. Revise it if your instructor directs.
To: Camille Chavez
From: Kennedy Freed
Subject: Luncheon Talks
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You’ve probably seen us working hard to get good speakers to speak at our “Lunch and Learn” sessions. Well, we’ve finally lined up speakers for September and October. It took a little twisting of arms, but we do have some really good speakers lined up. We’re scheduling the talks from 12 to 1, but the speakers should plan to speak for only about 30 minutes and leave 10 to 20 minutes for questions and answer.
I need you to send messages to these speakers to confirm. If any of them has questions or needs to change his date, just have them call my cell at 213.348.4421. We will need to get this done as soon as possible since the listing will be released in early September. The speakers include Alaina Adams, who agreed to speak at our first fall session on Tuesday, September 24. Her topic is “How to Talk So People Will Listen.” Another interesting speaker is Caitlyn Cervantes. Her topic is “Ten Top Tips for Eating Healthy.” Caitlyn’s date is Tuesday, October 22. Another speaker who just agreed is Brandon Tabaldo, and his topic is “Staying Safe, Private, and Secure on Social Networks.” We were able to schedule Mr. Tabaldo for Tuesday, October 15.
Oh yes, here are the e-mail addresses: alina.adams@circe.com, btabaldo@intercoastal.com, and caitlyn.cervantes@rio.com. Thank you, Camille!
Kennedy Freed
1. List at least five weaknesses of this message.

2. Outline a writing plan (not the actual message) for this information e-mail.
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