Post this test to your Coursework Portfolio. Instructions: Revise the email message below using the strategies we have practiced in Chapters 2-4: 1. point of view (passive-active) 2. inclusive language 3. positive tone 4. common courtesy EMAIL ESOL 200 Online From: Roxanne Smith. To: Kay Arthurs CC: Subject: Hi 5. conciseness 6. formality 7. vocabulary 8. readability (listing, etc.) Dear Mrs. Kay Arthurs: This memo is to inform you that two new agents packages will be delivered to you next week. I am also notifying and informing you that the package of documents will contain the following three documents. Firstly, it will contain updated real estate contract information and secondly, it will contain the new guidelines for open house inspections and finally it will contain client agreement forms which are updated and new. We will not have the new forms until next week because they have not been printed yet!!! At this point in time, we cannot offer new real estate agents a 50/50 commission split. The only available commission split is 60/40! Just in case you don't understand the reason for this split, read the client agreement forms carefully. When you are ready to sign up a new client have him fill out these new forms. This is extremely important! Also, send me the names and contact information of the two new agents in your office. If we don't have From: Roxanne Smith To: Kay Arthurs CC: Subject: Hi Dear Mrs. Kay Arthurs: This memo is to inform you that two new agents packages will be delivered to you next week. I am also notifying and informing you that the package of documents will contain the following three documents. Firstly, it will contain updated real estate contract information and secondly, it will contain the new guidelines for open house inspections and finally it will contain client agreement forms which are updated and new. We will not have the new forms until next week because they have not been printed yet!!! At this point in time, we cannot offer new real estate agents a 50/50 commission split. The only available commission split is 60/40! Just in case you don't understand the reason for this split, read the client agreement forms carefully. When you are ready to sign up a new client have him fill out these new forms. This is extremely important! Also, send me the names and contact information of the two new agents in your office. If we don't have this information, we cannot distribute their commissions. After you have subsequently received the two new agents' packages next week, reply to me. Roxanne