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As a member of the planning committee for an upcoming conference, you have been asked to draft a message requesting information about whether the venue is accessible for all participants. YOUR TASK. Analyze this message and list its writing weaknesses. Does this message apply the advice in this chapter for writing requests? If your instructor directs, revise the message using the suggestions you learned in this and previous chapters. Strive to arrange the information in an orderly bulleted list. Angela.Marakot@capitalhilton.com Carol.Frazier@gmail.com Cc: Nanci.Masri@gmail.com; Jason.Nadir@hotmail.com; Lori.Petuno@gmail.com Subject: Need Information To: From: Dear Angela: How is your day going? I hope well! I need some information, and I found your name at the Capital Hilton booking site. I'm on the planning committee for our upcoming Accessibility For All (AFA) conference that we would like to hold in Washington next fall. Will you please answer the following questions that need answers? The Capital Hilton comes highly recommended. Does your hotel provide assistive listening systems? Such as the induction-loop system that bypasses acoustical condi- tions and delivers sound directly to listeners? Does the hotel have accessible parking? We would need level parking nearby with drop-off availability up close to the building. In the matter of accessible restrooms, are ADA restrooms available on the meeting room floors? Some of our attendees might bring service animals. Do you provide a comfortable space for them to rest during an event? Do you also have accessible nearby toileting and watering facilities for service animals? Finally, do your meeting rooms have ample accessible electrical outlets? Do they accommodate laptops, adaptive devices. and other electronics? Thank you. Carol.Frazier@gmail.com AFA Fall Conference, Washington As a member of the planning committee for an upcoming conference, you have been asked to draft a message requesting information about whether the venue is accessible for all participants. YOUR TASK. Analyze this message and list its writing weaknesses. Does this message apply the advice in this chapter for writing requests? If your instructor directs, revise the message using the suggestions you learned in this and previous chapters. Strive to arrange the information in an orderly bulleted list. Angela.Marakot@capitalhilton.com Carol.Frazier@gmail.com Cc: Nanci.Masri@gmail.com; Jason.Nadir@hotmail.com; Lori.Petuno@gmail.com Subject: Need Information To: From: Dear Angela: How is your day going? I hope well! I need some information, and I found your name at the Capital Hilton booking site. I'm on the planning committee for our upcoming Accessibility For All (AFA) conference that we would like to hold in Washington next fall. Will you please answer the following questions that need answers? The Capital Hilton comes highly recommended. Does your hotel provide assistive listening systems? Such as the induction-loop system that bypasses acoustical condi- tions and delivers sound directly to listeners? Does the hotel have accessible parking? We would need level parking nearby with drop-off availability up close to the building. In the matter of accessible restrooms, are ADA restrooms available on the meeting room floors? Some of our attendees might bring service animals. Do you provide a comfortable space for them to rest during an event? Do you also have accessible nearby toileting and watering facilities for service animals? Finally, do your meeting rooms have ample accessible electrical outlets? Do they accommodate laptops, adaptive devices. and other electronics? Thank you. Carol.Frazier@gmail.com AFA Fall Conference, Washington As a member of the planning committee for an upcoming conference, you have been asked to draft a message requesting information about whether the venue is accessible for all participants. YOUR TASK. Analyze this message and list its writing weaknesses. Does this message apply the advice in this chapter for writing requests? If your instructor directs, revise the message using the suggestions you learned in this and previous chapters. Strive to arrange the information in an orderly bulleted list. Angela.Marakot@capitalhilton.com Carol.Frazier@gmail.com Cc: Nanci.Masri@gmail.com; Jason.Nadir@hotmail.com; Lori.Petuno@gmail.com Subject: Need Information To: From: Dear Angela: How is your day going? I hope well! I need some information, and I found your name at the Capital Hilton booking site. I'm on the planning committee for our upcoming Accessibility For All (AFA) conference that we would like to hold in Washington next fall. Will you please answer the following questions that need answers? The Capital Hilton comes highly recommended. Does your hotel provide assistive listening systems? Such as the induction-loop system that bypasses acoustical condi- tions and delivers sound directly to listeners? Does the hotel have accessible parking? We would need level parking nearby with drop-off availability up close to the building. In the matter of accessible restrooms, are ADA restrooms available on the meeting room floors? Some of our attendees might bring service animals. Do you provide a comfortable space for them to rest during an event? Do you also have accessible nearby toileting and watering facilities for service animals? Finally, do your meeting rooms have ample accessible electrical outlets? Do they accommodate laptops, adaptive devices. and other electronics? Thank you. Carol.Frazier@gmail.com AFA Fall Conference, Washington As a member of the planning committee for an upcoming conference, you have been asked to draft a message requesting information about whether the venue is accessible for all participants. YOUR TASK. Analyze this message and list its writing weaknesses. Does this message apply the advice in this chapter for writing requests? If your instructor directs, revise the message using the suggestions you learned in this and previous chapters. Strive to arrange the information in an orderly bulleted list. Angela.Marakot@capitalhilton.com Carol.Frazier@gmail.com Cc: Nanci.Masri@gmail.com; Jason.Nadir@hotmail.com; Lori.Petuno@gmail.com Subject: Need Information To: From: Dear Angela: How is your day going? I hope well! I need some information, and I found your name at the Capital Hilton booking site. I'm on the planning committee for our upcoming Accessibility For All (AFA) conference that we would like to hold in Washington next fall. Will you please answer the following questions that need answers? The Capital Hilton comes highly recommended. Does your hotel provide assistive listening systems? Such as the induction-loop system that bypasses acoustical condi- tions and delivers sound directly to listeners? Does the hotel have accessible parking? We would need level parking nearby with drop-off availability up close to the building. In the matter of accessible restrooms, are ADA restrooms available on the meeting room floors? Some of our attendees might bring service animals. Do you provide a comfortable space for them to rest during an event? Do you also have accessible nearby toileting and watering facilities for service animals? Finally, do your meeting rooms have ample accessible electrical outlets? Do they accommodate laptops, adaptive devices. and other electronics? Thank you. Carol.Frazier@gmail.com AFA Fall Conference, Washington As a member of the planning committee for an upcoming conference, you have been asked to draft a message requesting information about whether the venue is accessible for all participants. YOUR TASK. Analyze this message and list its writing weaknesses. Does this message apply the advice in this chapter for writing requests? If your instructor directs, revise the message using the suggestions you learned in this and previous chapters. Strive to arrange the information in an orderly bulleted list. Angela.Marakot@capitalhilton.com Carol.Frazier@gmail.com Cc: Nanci.Masri@gmail.com; Jason.Nadir@hotmail.com; Lori.Petuno@gmail.com Subject: Need Information To: From: Dear Angela: How is your day going? I hope well! I need some information, and I found your name at the Capital Hilton booking site. I'm on the planning committee for our upcoming Accessibility For All (AFA) conference that we would like to hold in Washington next fall. Will you please answer the following questions that need answers? The Capital Hilton comes highly recommended. Does your hotel provide assistive listening systems? Such as the induction-loop system that bypasses acoustical condi- tions and delivers sound directly to listeners? Does the hotel have accessible parking? We would need level parking nearby with drop-off availability up close to the building. In the matter of accessible restrooms, are ADA restrooms available on the meeting room floors? Some of our attendees might bring service animals. Do you provide a comfortable space for them to rest during an event? Do you also have accessible nearby toileting and watering facilities for service animals? Finally, do your meeting rooms have ample accessible electrical outlets? Do they accommodate laptops, adaptive devices. and other electronics? Thank you. Carol.Frazier@gmail.com AFA Fall Conference, Washington As a member of the planning committee for an upcoming conference, you have been asked to draft a message requesting information about whether the venue is accessible for all participants. YOUR TASK. Analyze this message and list its writing weaknesses. Does this message apply the advice in this chapter for writing requests? If your instructor directs, revise the message using the suggestions you learned in this and previous chapters. Strive to arrange the information in an orderly bulleted list. Angela.Marakot@capitalhilton.com Carol.Frazier@gmail.com Cc: Nanci.Masri@gmail.com; Jason.Nadir@hotmail.com; Lori.Petuno@gmail.com Subject: Need Information To: From: Dear Angela: How is your day going? I hope well! I need some information, and I found your name at the Capital Hilton booking site. I'm on the planning committee for our upcoming Accessibility For All (AFA) conference that we would like to hold in Washington next fall. Will you please answer the following questions that need answers? The Capital Hilton comes highly recommended. Does your hotel provide assistive listening systems? Such as the induction-loop system that bypasses acoustical condi- tions and delivers sound directly to listeners? Does the hotel have accessible parking? We would need level parking nearby with drop-off availability up close to the building. In the matter of accessible restrooms, are ADA restrooms available on the meeting room floors? Some of our attendees might bring service animals. Do you provide a comfortable space for them to rest during an event? Do you also have accessible nearby toileting and watering facilities for service animals? Finally, do your meeting rooms have ample accessible electrical outlets? Do they accommodate laptops, adaptive devices. and other electronics? Thank you. Carol.Frazier@gmail.com AFA Fall Conference, Washington

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Here are some writing weaknesses in the provided message along with suggestions for improvement Lack of Formal Greeting The message starts with How is your day going which is overly informal for a pro... View the full answer