Criticize the following thank-you message from a college student to a professor who 

has sent he a job lead. (LO6)

 

Subject: Thanks 

Hey, Prof. Smith, 

Thanks for the hot tip on the job! I'm interviewing there tomorrow! 

Sarah

 

Rewrite:

 

Subject: It is too brief and abrupt. Thanks" for what?

Hey, Prof. Smith": It's is too informal an address

Thank you for the lead on sales position at XYZ Company. I am interviewing tomorrow.

            Sarah

 

Discuss your criticism before your re-write? Also, What could I add to the rewrite message?

 

Answer rating: 100% (QA)

Critique The original thankyou message is appreciative but lacks a formal tone and detailed expression of gratitude It is brief and might leave the pr... View the full answer