Blog writer Brian Drummond needs examples and information for a blog he plans to publish on the Online Voices platform. He writes to Nadya DeAlba, office manager at a high-tech firm, requesting information and examples. He met Ms. DeAlba at a conference and believes that she could be a willing source of information for his blog. Ms. DeAlba’s advice is valuable, but her message is poorly organized, contains writing and grammar errors, and is hard to read

Your Task. 

Analyze the following poorly written message from Nadya DeAlba. Identify its weaknesses including sentence fragments, wordiness, grammar faults, misspellings, and other writing problems you have studied. Include examples. Then revise if your instructor advises. Your instructor may provide a possible revision. Remember that you can download these documents at www.cengage.com

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To: Brian Drummond From: Nadya DeAlba Subject: Your Request Brian, Thanks for this opportunity to make a contribution to your blog post for Online Voices. You ask that I confine my remarks to five main and important points. Which I will try to do. However, I could share many more annoying habits that create tension in the workplace. They interrupt workflow, reduce productivity, and lead to stress. Here's my top five annoying tech habits that drive coworkers crazy. I have observed these in our open office. The first has to do with cc abuse. Todays e-mail programs make it to easy to copy people who may be unrelated to the discussion. Before clicking the cc field, writers should ask themselves whether it's critical to ask all receivers specific questions such as who wants the vegan or the barbecue lunch. Another annoying habit is what I call "radio silence." This occurs when receivers fail to respond to e-mails within 24 hours. It's not that I expect responses to every Slack message, tweet, DM, text message, voice mail, or Facebook post. As a writer, however, it is annoying when important e-mail messages are ignored. One of my coworkers complains about notification overload. Offices today are awash with chirps, dings, and rings of countless devices that are allowed to ring and echo through the sweeping open space. The constant ding, ding, dinging is not only annoying to the intended recipients. But also to nearby colleagues. Another annoying habit has to do with jumbled threads. When writers do not observe the conventions of threading their comments on Slack or e-mail. The structure of the conversation becomes garbled. This really annoying behavior is one of the many tech irritants that aggravate coworkers.