The following cover letter accompanies Annalise Ortez-Villas rsum (Radical Rewrite 13.1). Like this applicants rsum, the cover

The following cover letter accompanies Annalise Ortez-Villa’s résumé (Radical Rewrite 13.1). Like this applicant’s résumé, the cover letter needs major revision.

Your Task.

Analyze each section of the following cover letter and list at least eight weaknesses. Your instructor may ask you to revise this letter before showing you an improved version.

Data from Radical Rewrite 13.1

One effective way to improve your writing skills is to critique and edit the résumé of someone else.

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To Whom It May Concern: I saw your accounting position listing yesterday and would like to apply right away. It would be so exiting to work for your esteemed firm! This position would really give me much needed real-world experience and help me become a CPA. I have all the qualifications you require in your add and more. I am a senior at Colorado State University-Pueblo and an Accounting major (with a minor in Finance) and have completed 64 units of upper-division course work. Accounting and Finance are my passion and I want to become a CPA and a financial advisor. I have taken eight courses in accounting and now work as a part-time financial advisor with Primerica Financial Services in Pueblo. I should also tell you that I was at Target for four years. I learned alot, but my heart is in accounting and finance. I am a team player, a born leader, motivated, reliable, and I show excellent composure in stressful situation, for example, when customers complain. I put myself through school and always carry at least 12 units while working part time. You will probably agree that I am a good candidate for your internship position, which I understand should start July 1. I feel that my motivation, passion, and strong people skills will serve your company well. Sincerely,