Institutions of higher learning are meant for people hoping to broaden their interests and knowledge in order
Question:
Institutions of higher learning are meant for people hoping to broaden their interests and knowledge in order to contribute to society. I, myself, agree with this principle, and I also agree that a degree can help me acquire a job and be good at it. Along with this, I do not doubt that these institutions facilitate higher cognitive functioning. What I do not agree with is the approach that these institutions have towards the sciences. In fact, I categorically oppose the favouritism that is always shown to the sciences whenever financial matters are considered.
Rewrite the paragraph on higher learning, eliminating the references to opinion and changing the pronouns I, me, etc., to one or a suitable noun. Does the revised paragraph sound more forceful? How is the writer's credibility enhanced?