Camille Montano has the right idea in sending a follow-up message after her interview for an accounting position in Denver. However, her message could be more effective.

Your Task. Based on what you have learned list at least five weaknesses. Look for problems with punctuation, wordiness, proofreading, capitalization, sentence structure, and other writing techniques you have studied.

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1340 East Phillips Avenue Apartment D Littleton, CO 80126 June 17, 2019 Ms. Michelle Genovese High Country Accounting 2810 East Sixth Avenue Denver, CO 80218-3453 Dear Ms. Genovese: It was altogether extremely enjoyable to talk with you about the open position at High Country Accounting. The position as you presented it seems to be a excellent match for my training and skills. The creative approach to Account Management that you described, confirmed my desire to work in a imaginative firm such as High County Accounting. I would bring to the position strong organizational skills, and I have the ability to encourage others to work cooperatively within the department. My training in analysis and application of accounting data and financial reporting; as well as my expe- rience as a financial consultant in the mortgage industry would enable me to help with the backlog of client projects that you mentioned. I certainly understand your departments need for strong support in the administrative area. I am definitely attentive to details and my organizational skills will help to free you to deal with more pressing issues in the management area. I neglected to emphasize during our very interesting interview that I also have a minor in finance despite the fact that it was on my rsum. Thanks for taking the time to interview me, and explain the goals of your agency along with the dutys of this position. As I am sure you noticed during the interview I am very interested in working for High Country Accounting because I need to get a job to start paying off my student loans, and look forward to hearing from you about this position. In the event that you might possibly need additional information from me or facts about me, all you need to do is shoot me an e-mail. Sincerely, Camille Montano Camille Montano