$10.$ Analyze the following e$-$mail message. Revise the message so that it reflects some of the writing techniques you learned from this course. Hint: How can you make the message more courteous, positive, precise, and professional? Focus on conciseness, familiar words, and developing the "you" view. $(10$ points$)$

To: All Environmental Health Department Team Members

From: Jonathan Westgate

Subject: Please Reduce Your Employee Driving Trips to Office

Our company faces harsh governmental penalties if we fail to comply with the Air Quality Management District's program to reduce the number of automobile trips made by employees.

The aforementioned program stipulates that we offer incentives to entice employees to discontinue driving their vehicles as a means of transportation to and from this place of employment.

First, we are prepared to offer a full day off without penalty. However, the employee must not drive to work and must maintain a $75$ percent vanpool participation rate for six months. Second, we offer a vanpool subsidy of $$100$ a month, and the vanpool driver will not be limited in the personal use he makes of the vehicle on his own time. Third, employees in the vanpool will not be forced to park in outlying lots.

Pertaining to our need to have you leave your cars at home, all employees are herewith instructed to communicate with Ralph Mancini, who will be facilitating the above$-$referenced program.