1. Drunk Drivers

People caught driving while drunkeven first offendersshould be jailed. Drunk driving, first of all, is more dangerous than carrying around a loaded gun. In addition, a jail term would show drivers that society will no longer tolerate such careless and dangerous behavior. Finally, severe penalties might encourage solutions to the problem of drinking and driving. People who go out for a good time and intend to have several drinks would always designate one person, who would stay completely sober, as the driver.

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2. A Frustrating Moment

A frustrating moment happened to me several days ago. When I was shopping. I had picked up a tube of crest toothpaste and a jar of noxema skin cream. After the cashier rang up the purchases, which came to $4.15. I handed her $10. Then got back my change, which was only $0.85. I told the cashier that she had made a mistake. Giving me change for $5 instead of $10. But she insist that I had only gave her $5, I became very upset and demand that she return the rest of my change. She refused to do so instead she asked me to step aside so she could wait on the next customer. I stood very rigid, trying not to lose my temper. I simply said to her, Im not going to leave here, Miss, without my change for $10. Giving in at this point a bell was rung and the manager was summoned. After the situation was explain to him, he ask the cashier to ring off her register to check for the change. After doing so, the cashier was $5 over her sale receipts. Only then did the manager return my change and apologize for the cashier mistake.

a.The paragraph is not unified.

b.The paragraph is not adequately supported.

c. The paragraph is not well organized.

d.The paragraph does not show a command of sentence skills.

e.The paragraph is well written in terms of the four bases.

3. Asking Girls Out

There are several reasons I have trouble asking girls to go out with me. I have asked some girls out and have been turned down. This is one reason that I cant talk to them. At one time I was very shy and quiet, and people sometimes didnt even know I was present. I can talk to girls now as friends, but as soon as I want to ask them out, I usually start to become quiet, and a little bit of shyness comes out. When I finally get the nerve up, the girl will turn me down, and I swear that I will never ask another one out again. I feel sure I will get a refusal, and I have no confidence in myself. Also, my friends mock me, though they arent any better than I am. It can become discouraging when your friends get on you. Sometimes I just stand there and wait to hear what line the girl will use. The one they use a lot is We like you as a friend, Ted, and its better that way. Sometimes I want to have the line put on a tape recorder, so they wont have to waste their breath on me. All my past experiences with girls have been just as bad. One girl used me to make her old boyfriend jealous. Then when she succeeded, she started going out with him again. I had a bad experience when I took a girl to the prom. I spent a lot of money on her. Two days later, she told me that she was going steady with another guy. I feel that when I meet a girl I have to be sure I can trust her. I dont want her to turn on me.

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b.The paragraph is not adequately supported.

c. The paragraph is not well organized.

d.The paragraph does not show a command of sentence skills.

e.The paragraph is well written in terms of the four bases.

4. A Change in My Writing

A technique in my present English class has corrected a writing problem that Ive always had. In past English courses, I had major problems with commas in the wrong places, bad spelling, capitalizing the wrong words, sentence fragments, and run-on sentences. I never had any big problems with unity, support, or coherence, but the sentence skills were another matter. They were like little bugs that always appeared to infest my writing. My present instructor asked me to rewrite papers, just concentrating on sentence skills. I thought that the instructor was crazy because I didnt feel that rewriting would do any good. I soon became certain that my instructor was out of his mind, for he made me rewrite my first paper four times. It was very frustrating, for I became tired of doing the same paper over and over. I wanted to belt my instructor against the wall when Id show him each new draft and hed find skills mistakes and say, Rewrite. Finally, my papers began to improve and the sentence skills began to fall into place. I was able to see them and correct them before turning in a paper, whereas I couldnt before. Why or how this happened I dont know, but I think that rewriting helped a lot. It took me most of the semester, but I stuck it out and the work paid off.

a.The paragraph is not unified.

b.The paragraph is not adequately supported.

c. The paragraph is not well organized.

d.The paragraph does not show a command of sentence skills.

e.The paragraph is well written in terms of the four bases.

5. Luck and Me

I am a very lucky man, though the rest of my family has not always been lucky. Sometimes when I get depressed, which is too frequently, its hard to see just how lucky I am. Im lucky that Im living in a country that is free. Im allowed to worship the way I want to, and that is very important to me. Without a belief in God a person cannot live with any real certainty in life. My relationship with my wife is a source of good fortune for me. She gives me security, and thats something I need a lot. Even with these positive realities in my life, I still seem to find time for insecurity, worry, and, worst of all, depression. At times in my life I have had bouts of terrible luck. But overall, Im a very lucky guy. I plan to further develop the positive aspects of my life and try to eliminate the negative ones.

a.The paragraph is not unified.

b.The paragraph is not adequately supported.

c. The paragraph is not well organized.

d.The paragraph does not show a command of sentence skills.

e.The paragraph is well written in terms of the four bases.