4. Peer Review Challenge - Critical Thinking and Sentence Errors

Once you finish writing your first draft of a paragraph or essay, you might consider exchanging your work with a classmate. Read that person's paper carefully, commenting on the things you enjoyed about it, parts that could use clarification, and your thoughts on the main idea. When you give a classmate advice on how to improve his or her writing, you are acting as a peer reviewer. Be sure to answer any specific questions your classmate has, and always be kind.

Directions: Read the student scenario and paragraph. Then, answer the questions that follow.

(Note:If either of the terms implied main ideaor inferenceare unfamiliar to you, click the blue links in the questions to receive definitions.)

BECKY:"I've just finished the rough draft of a paragraph for my English class, and I'm looking for a peer reviewer. Do you think you can read my draft and give me some advice, especially regarding my main idea? Also, because I struggle with run-on sentences, comma splices, and fragments, would you keep an eye out for any sentence errors I make?"

Becky Nguyen

October 1, 2016

ENG221, Prof. Marchiano

Assignment 5

Cure Jet Lag

If you experience fatigue and irritability after flying long distances. You might be experiencing jet lag. One well-established type of jet lag treatment is diet. Some experts suggest that a heavy intake of carbohydrates prior to departure will help stave off jet lag, while others advocate a low-carb plan. Other dieticians recommend a combination of protein-rich and carbohydrate-rich meals of varying sizes. Another common type of jet lag treatment is light therapy. Travelers can now buy miniature fluorescent lights that imitate sunlight, they can also buy eye shades that block out light. Many hotel rooms feature both heavy, light-blocking curtains and lights that imitate sunlight. If you are planning on traveling in the near future, keep these jet lag treatments in mind.

Becky Nguyen

October 1, 2016

ENG221, Prof. Marchiano

Assignment 5

Cure Jet Lag

If you experience fatigue and irritability after flying long distances. You might be experiencing jet lag. One well-established type of jet lag treatment is diet. Some experts suggest that a heavy intake of carbohydrates prior to departure will help stave off jet lag, while others advocate a low-carb plan. Other dieticians recommend a combination of protein-rich and carbohydrate-rich meals of varying sizes. Another common type of jet lag treatment is light therapy. Travelers can now buy miniature fluorescent lights that imitate sunlight, they can also buy eye shades that block out light. Many hotel rooms feature both heavy, light-blocking curtains and lights that imitate sunlight. If you are planning on traveling in the near future, keep these jet lag treatments in mind.

Critical Thinking

Becky has included an implied main idearather than a clear topic sentence. How could she take this implied information and turn it into a stated main idea?

A combination of protein-rich and carbohydrate-rich meals will treat jet lag symptoms.

Jet lag is something that most travelers experience.

Several treatments exist to cure symptoms of jet lag.

Which of the following are inferencesyou could reasonably make, based on the information in Becky's paragraph?Check all that apply.

Foods rich in proteins and carbohydrates can treat jet lag symptoms.

Everyone who travels by plane will experience jet lag.

Jet lag is caused by traveling to and from different time zones.

Jet lag should discourage people from traveling by plane.

Jet lag is not a real condition.

Grammar

If you experiencing fatigue and irritability after flying long distances. You might be experiencing jet lag.

This sentence pair from Becky's paragraph contains a sentence error. Which of the following fixes this error?

You experience fatigue and irritability after flying long distances, you might be experiencing jet lag.

Experiencing fatigue and irritability after flying long distances, is the experience of jet lag.

If you experience fatigue and irritability after flying long distances, you might be experiencing jet lag.

Travelers can now buy miniature fluorescent lights that imitate sunlight, they can also buy eye shades that block out light.

This sentence from Becky's paragraph contains a sentence error. Which of the following is one way this error can be fixed?

Travelers can now buy miniature fluorescent lights. That imitate sunlight, they can also buy eye shades that block out light.

Travelers can now buy miniature fluorescent lights that imitate sunlight they can also buy eye shades that block out light.

Travelers can now buy miniature fluorescent lights that imitate sunlight. They can also buy eye shades that block out light.