7.3Document for Analysis: Lost in the Cloud

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In the following interoffice memo, product manager Alexandra Amato reports to CEO Mason Razipour the high points of a workshop he asked her to attend. Alexandra's jumbledmemo offers solid information, but it is so poorly written that it fails to achieve its purpose.

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Date:July 10, 2018

To:Mason Razipour, CEO

From:Alexandra Amato, Product Manager

Subject:Cloud Computing

Some time ago you signed me up to attend The Promise of Cloud Computing workshop. I did attend it on July 8. Herewith is a short report, as you requested. If you prefer, I could give a presentation about what I learned at the next management council meeting. Is that meeting coming up in August?

Okay, here's my report. I know you asked that it be brief, so will do! Lisa Moritz, the workshop leader told the group that the big problem today is that in this anytime/anywhere workplace employees are working with tons of devices from various locations. With employees scattered around, software and file storage must be accessible anywhere, anytime. It can't be on one type of device, and it can no longer be stuck in one place to be accessed with incompatible devices. Lisa told us that there are three main ways that cloud computing can improve the workplace. No. 1. Cloud computing makes it possible to access nearly all types of applications or software. A vast number of cloud-based services (e-mail, online storage, online file transfer) can be made available to lots of userswithout the problem of compatibility. Another big benefit is the promise of making employees more efficient. How? Free access to unlimited ways to provide on-the-spot solutions eliminates searching and downtime. Cloud computing is also a way to improve communications. It completely transforms the way work is performed. Lisa didn't tell us exactly how this was accomplished, but she said that cloud computing makes for a happier, mentally healthy atmosphere all around.

This is just a bare-bones summary of what I learned. If you want to hear more, please do not hesitate to call.

Note:This message is formatted as an interoffice memo.

I had revised this and apparently it i not the right way so i need help if possible.