As you write/edit these letters please refer to the inductive (good news first) approach when writing..

• Introductory paragraph
• Explanation
  • Negative or Bad-news statement
• Counterproposal or silver lining idea
• Closing paragraph

Wedding Request Refusal

Analyze the following poorly written request refusal (Bad news). There are at least five weaknesses. Revise, to make it more reader focused, add the date, your name, then delete these instructions, and submit to Canvas.

Napa Valley Inn210 Deer Park Drive Napa, California 9455

Current dateMs. Sonya Capretta2459 Sierra AvenueFresno, CA 93710

Dear Ms. Capretta:

We regret to inform you that the wedding date you request in your letter of February 2 at the Napa Valley Inn is unavailable. Unfortunately, we are fully booked for all of the Saturdays in June, as you probably already suspected.

June is our busiest month, and smart brides make their reservations many monthseven yearsin advance. Thats because the Napa Valley Inn is the ideal romantic getaway for weddings. With unparalleled cuisine and service, along with panoramic Napa Valley and vineyard views, our Inn offers unique, intimate ambiance in a breathtaking location for your special event.

We apologize if we have caused you any inconvenience. However, if you could change your wedding date to the middle of the week, we would try to accommodate your party. We do have a few midweek spots open in June, but even those dates are rapidly filling up. With 45 Mediterranean-style rooms and suites, each with its own sunny private terrace, the Napa Valley Inn is the perfect location for you and your partner to begin your married lives. Afternoon ceremonies typically begin at 11 a.m., while golden sunsets at the Napa Valley Inn offer a romantic prelude of the evening to come. Evening ceremonies usually begin at 6 p.m. Im available if you want to arrange something.

Sincerely,Your NameYour Title