Assignment: Chapter 6 6-15. Message for Analysis 6.A: Revising to Improve Readability Analyze the strengths and weaknesses of this message, then revise it so that it follows the guidelines in Chapter 4 through Chapter 6 As an organization, the North American Personal Motorsports Marketing Association has committed ourselves to helping our membersa diverse group comprising of dealers of motorcycles, all-terrain vehicles, Snowmobiles, and personal watercraft-achieve their business objectives. Consequently, our organization, which usually goes under the initials NAPMMA, has the following aims, goals, and objectives. Firstly, we endeavor to aid or assist our members in reaching their business objectives. Second, NAPMMA communicates ("lobbying in slang terms) with local, state, and national governmental agencies and leaders on issues of importance to our members. And lastly, we educate the motorsports public, that being current motorsports vehicle owners, and prospective owners of said vehicles, on the safe and enjoyable operation of they're vehicles. 6-22. Editing for Conciseness (Long Words) [LO-3] Revise the following sentences using shorter, simpler words:|| a My antiquated PC is ineffectual for solving sophisticated problems. b. It is imperative that the pay increments be terminated before an inordinate deficit is accumulated. c. There was unanimity among the executives that his behavior was cause for a mandatory meeting with the company's human resources director. 6-24. Editing for Conciseness (Lengthy Phrases) [LO-3] Rephrase the following in fewer words: a. In the near future b. In the event that c. In order that 6-25. Editing for Conciseness (Lengthy Phrases) [LO-3] Revise to condense these sentences to as few words as possible: a. We are of the conviction that writing is important. b. In all probability, we're likely to have a price increase. c. Our goals include making a determination about that in the near future. 6-27. Editing for Clarity (Hedging) [LO-3] Rewrite these sentences so that they no longer contain any hedging: a. It would appear that someone apparently entered illegally. b. It may be possible that sometime in the near future the situation is likely to improve. c. Your report seems to suggest that we might be losing money. 6-29. Editing for Clarity (Parallelism) [LO-3] Revise these sentences to present the ideas in parallel form: d. This book was exciting, well written and held my interest. e. Don is both a hard worker and he knows the financial reporting standards. 6-30. Editing for Clarity (Awkward References) [LO-3] Revise the following sentences to delete the awkward references: a The vice president in charge of sales and the production manager are responsible for the keys to 34A and 35A, respectively. b. The keys to 34A and 35A are in executive hands, with the former belonging to the vice president in charge of sales and the latter belonging to the production manager. 6-31. Editing for Clarity (Dangling Modifiers) [LO-3] Rewrite these sentences to clarify the dangling modifiers: a Full of trash and ripped-up newspapers, we left Dallas on a plane that apparently hadn't been cleaned in days. b. Lying on the shelf, Ruby found the operations manual