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Revising for Conciseness $-$ Eliminating Flabby Expressions, Long Lead$-$Ins, and Unnecessary Fillers

Time is money in any business environment. People want information communicated quickly and clearly. To make your writing more concise and understandable, avoid flabby expressions, long lead$-$ins, and unnecessary fillers. Your audience will appreciate your brevity.

If your writing contains a flabby expression like in view of the fact that, replace it with the word

For each of the following two sentences, choose the best revision.

This memo is to inform you that the team has compiled the basic fundamentals of the accounting procedure, and we have noted that there is a serious concern we have identified in column $D$ of the Excel spreadsheet.

The team is sending you this information to let you know that it has reached an end result with the accounting assignment. Please take a serious look at column $D$ of the Excel spreadsheet.

The team has finished the accounting assignment. Please review our questions in column D$.$

This memo is to inform you that the team has put together the accounting assignment. We would also like to note that there is a potential opportunity for error in column D of the Excel spreadsheet.