Chapter $4,$ Preparing Written Messages, Student Handout

ACTIVITY $4\mathrm{.}2$: STEP $6-$PREPARE THE FIRST DRAFT

EMPHASIS TECHNIQUES

Choose the preferred sentence from each pair and justify your choice.

a$.(1)$ Lindsay's request to telecommute was denied, but she will begin a flextime schedule in two weeks.

$(2)$ Although her request to telecommute was denied, Lindsay will begin a flextime schedule in two weeks.

b$.(1)$ The Lawlor account was won.

$(2)$ Jennifer is responsible for our winning the Lawlor account.

c$.(1)$ Thank you for donating time to work with the United Way campaign this year.

$(2)$ Congratulations on your outstanding work as the campaign coordinator for the $2007$ United Way campaign. Our city's goal was easily exceeded thanks to your exceptional leadership abilities.

d$.(1)$ We appreciate your letting us know about your concerns.

$(2)$ We appreciate your letting us know about the broken equipment, the outdated materials, and the poor employee morale at your branch.

e$.(1)$ Your warranty does not cover these repair charges.

$(2)$ Had you completed all scheduled maintenance on your Lincoln LS$,$ your warranty would have covered these repair charges.