Directions: Study both the scenario and e-mail message rough draft below. Then, answer each question. When answering Questions 1 - 3, you may create fictional information.

SCENARIO

You are the HR manager for HealthFirst Inc. Your companys accountant has recently informed you that your workers compensation insurance premiums are higher than industry standards. In addition, you have noticed that employees are taking more sick days this year due to stress and mental health issues compared with last year.

You have shared this information with your company CEO, Jean Miller. Realizing the connection between physical fitness and employee well-being, Jean has suggested that you research ways to improve employee health and fitness.

Specifically, Jean has asked you to provide her with your recommendation for an employee fitness program at HealthFirst. She is requesting that you send this information in an e-mail message, using direct order, by April 7.

After careful research, you have concluded that the company should implement this fitness program starting July 1.

Last week, you had written a rough draft of the e-mail message to Jean, as shown below. However, after proofreading your rough draft, you realize that you will need to fix your mistakes before sending the final draft to your company CEO.

E-mail Message ROUGH DRAFT

DATE: March 22, 2022 TO: Jean Miller, CEO SUBJECT:

(1) There has been an increase in workers compensation (WC) insurance premiums in our company over the past 12 months. (2) In addition, employees have taken more sick days this year. (3) On March 1, you asked me to research ways to ameliorate the health of our employees.

(4) According to researchers, workplace fitness is important for everyone. (5) With regular exercise, employees can improve their overall health levels. (6) Therefore, our workers may take fewer sick days.

(7) HealthFirst should introduce an employee fitness program in several stages, starting July 1. (8) With a fitness program, we can ensure the health and safety of each and every employee. (9) I offer my full support with implimenting this program. (10) Please dont hesitate to contact me with any questions.

(11) You can read more about my proposal in the attachment, Program Details. (12) It provides proposed timetables for the different stages. (13) It also shows a cost breakdown for each stage.

A. Writing Tasks (5 points each)

1. Your rough draft is missing a subject line. Write an effective subject line that is appropriate for the Scenario described above. (Be sure to use Resource Book pages 54 and 55 to help answer this question.)

2. Evaluate the first sentence of your rough draft. If this is effective, write Correct. If not, create an appropriate first sentence. (Be sure to use Resource Book pages 52 to 54 to help answer this question.)

3. Your rough draft is missing a goodwill close. Write an effective goodwill close that is appropriate for the Scenario described above. (Be sure to use Resource Book page 52 to help answer this question.)

B. Multiple Choice Questions (3 points each)

4. How many misspelled words does your rough draft contain?

   a. 0 b. 1 c. 2 d. 3

5. How many examples of passive voice does your rough draft contain?

   a. 0 b. 1 c. 2 d. 3

6. How many expletives does your rough draft contain?

   a. 0 b. 1 c. 2 d. 3

7. Which sentence contains a cliche?

   1. Sentence 6

   2. Sentence 10

   3. Sentence 12

   4. (none of the above)

8. Which sentence contains two words that are redundant?

   1. Sentence 8

   2. Sentence 11

   3. Sentence 13

   4. (none of the above)

9. Which sentence contains formal wording?

   1. Sentence 3

   2. Sentence 4

   3. Sentence 5

   4. (none of the above)

10. Which sentence begins with a transition word to connect with the previous sentence?

1. Sentence 1

2. Sentence 6

3. Sentence 9

4. (all of the above)

C. Critical Question (4 points) 11. When is our final exam?

1. May 17

2. May 18

3. May 19

4. May 20