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Workplace Writing Analysis I

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Workplace Writing Analysis I $(10\%)$

Due: Thursday, February $6$ @$11$:$59$ pm

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I have abided by Seneca's Academic Integrity Policy and have not received, given, or used any unauthorized materials or unauthorized assistance of any means, including the use of ChatGPT, CoPilot, Grammerly $($or a similar app$)$ or any other GenAl, to complete this assessment. The answers provided reflects the quality of my learning, understanding, and studying. I acknowledge that should I violate Seneca's Academic Integrity Policy, I will accept the consequences of that action, the least of which will be zero percent on this assignment.EAC $594$

Workplace Writing Analysis I

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Overview

You wrote a memo to address cost concerns related to your team's tradeshow participation. However, you are not confident the memo contains all the necessary information and meets the highest business writing standards. So$,$ you submit your memo to CoPilot for a little assistance.

You submit your memo to CoPilot using the following prompt:

Please revise the following memo to reflect principles of good business writing

Copilot

I$\text{'}$d be happy to help with that! Could you please provide the memo you'd like revised?

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Trade shows are a great way for us to meet customers and sell our Life Fitness equipment. But instead of expanding our visits to these trade shows we continue to cut back the number that we attend. And we send fewer staff members. I know that you've been asking us to find ways to reduce costs, but perhaps we're not going about it right.

With increased air fares and hotel charges, my staff has tried to find ways to live within our tight budget. Yet we're being asked to find other ways to reduce our costs. I$\text{'}$m currently thinking ahead to the big Toronto trade show coming up in February.

One area where we could make a change is in the gift that we give away. In the past we have presented booth visitors with a nine$-$colour $T-$shirt that is silk screened and gorgeous. But it comes at a cost of $$45$ for each and every one of these beauties from a top$-$name designer. To save money, I suggest that we try a $$4t-$shirt made very inexpensively from a local unknown designer, which is reasonable. It'll have our name on it and after all, folks just use $t-$shirts for workouts. Who really cares if it is a fancy silk screened $t$ shirt or a functional local made one that has "Life Fitness" plastered on the chest? Since we give away over $1000$ t $-$shirts at our largest tradeshow, we could save big bucks by dumping the designer shirt. But we have to ack quickly. I've enclosed a cheap one for you to see.

Let me know what you think.EAC $594$

Workplace Writing Analysis I

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CoPilot provided the following "improved" response:

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Copilot

Date: $05/01/2025$

To: Candace

From: Rodrigo

Subject: Trade Booth

Dear Team,

Trade shows are a valuable opportunity for us to connect with customers and promote our Life Fitness equipment. However, we have been reducing our participation and the number of staff we send to these events. While I understand the need to cut costs, I believe we can approach this more effectively.

Given the rising costs of airfare and hotels, my team has been working hard to stay within our budget. Despite these efforts, we are still being asked to find additional savings. With the major Toronto trade show approaching in February, I have been considering alternative cost$-$saving measures.

One area for potential savings is the gifts we distribute at our booth. Historically, we have given away highquality, nine$-$color silk$-$screened T$-$shirts from a top$-$name designer, costing $$45$ each. To reduce expenses, I propose switching to a more affordable option: a $$4$ T$-$shirt from a local, lesser$-$known designer. These shirts will still feature our "Life fitness" branding and serve their purpose as workout attire. By making this change, we could save a significant amount, especially since we distribute over $1,000T-$shirts at our largest trade show.

Please review the enclosed sample of the proposed T$-$shirt and share your thoughts. We need to make a decision quickly to ensure we are prepared for the upcoming event.

Thank you for your attention to this matter.

Best regards,

Prour Name$]$EAC $594$

Workplace Writing Analysis I

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Although significantly improved, the revision provided by CoPilot missed several important elements of a well$-$written memo covered in Unit $4.$ To be prepared for the future of work, you must be able to identify and correct the e