Edit the following sentences. Try to achieve readable style by making the sentences clear and concise.

1. It is clear that the proposal does not fit with the soliciting companys criteria.

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2. It is evident that the survey results show the students dissatisfaction with university services.

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3. It should be noted that the new agenda will be effective by next month.

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4. There are three processes that must be followed in the integration of the new systems.

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5. Delegation is a means of reducing the managers workload.

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6. The video conferencing room will be reserved by us.

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7. Attempts were made by the sales department to assess the new strategy.

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8. The H.R. Director, in an attempt to present a very unique style of orientating new staff, decided to start a series of occupational workshops.

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Omit verbiage: Use concrete verbs to be clear and concise

Instead of	Use
give approval to
have a tendency to
Have an influence on
Give a notification of
Have a discussion about
At a later date
At the present time
By means of
Due to the fact that
Without further delay
We are not in position to
On a daily basis
In the normal course of procedure
In the event that
Pursuant to our agreement

Many writers use two or three words where one word will do. Check the following examples:

Absolutely free
Background experience
Basic fundamentals
Close proximity
Complete absence
Consensus of opinion
Exactly identical
Very unique
Very complete
Summarize briefly
Past experience
Final end

If you want to be clear, consider using shorter and more familiar words especially with an international audience or non-native speakers of English.

Instead of	Consider using
Accelerate
Accumulate
Aggregate
Anticipate
Correspondence
Endeavor
Facilitate
Inaugurate
Terminated
Subsequent

Some of the examples are by the author of this worksheet.

Reference:

Tebeaaux, E. & Dragga, Sam. 2012. The Essentials of Technical Communication. 2ed. Oxford: Oxford University Press.