Eliminate the nominalization and passive voice below! Edit these sentences for clarity, concision, and style. You may add or remove words if necessary, such as a subject, and delete words if desired. Just make them as clear and concise as possible.

a) describe why each sentence might be unclear

b) re-write the sentence

c) explain why the sentence should change in this way

1). This is a letter to inform you the issue of Mary. I am writing to address the circumstances surrounding Mary's employment the law firm.

2). Betty tried to persuade herself there would be some reasons for Peter not to do response for his job duties.

3). When customer complaints about our food is not fresh or clean enough, employees should exchange the food for customers immediately and apologies for our mistakes. This can improve the sincerity of our restaurant.

4). All employees at the Walmart complained that they were treated unequally on the salary payment which is unfair to them.

 

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1 a describe why each sentence might be unclear The first sentence is unclear because it uses a nomi... View the full answer