Example

Poor Thesis Statement

Cyber bullying is a real problem that must be dealt with now that social media has become so popular.

Good Thesis Statement

Two examples of the rewritten thesis statement have been provided for you. We want to show you that a two-sentence thesis statement can also be written as one sentence in some cases.

• Cyber bullying puts a lot of stress on many teens, and can cause depression, anxiety, and even suicidal thoughts. Parents should limit the usage of smartphones, monitor their children's online activity, and report any cyber bullying to school officials to combat this problem.
• Cyber bullying puts a lot of stress on many teens, and can cause depression, anxiety, and even suicidal thoughts; therefore, parents should limit the usage of smartphones, monitor their children's online activity, and report any cyber bullying to school officials to combat this problem.

Option 1

Instructions:

The following thesis statements are too narrow, too broad, or too vague, or they are factual statements that are not debatable. Revise three of them to make each of them an appropriate thesis statement (Branson, 2022). Please limit your revised thesis statements to one or two sentences.

Thesis Statements for you to Revise

• The grey wolf is a timid creature that is being hunted and exterminated.
• Organ donors deserve money for their sacrifice.
• This paper will look at the advantages of school uniforms.
• Saving the whales should be a top priority.
• Using the internet has a positive effect on people.

Please submit this assignment as a Word document. List each thesis statement you want to revise, then rewrite the thesis below it. You can use a structure like this.

1. Original Thesis Statement
   1. Revised Thesis Statement
2. Original Thesis Statement
   1. Revised Thesis Statement
3. Original Thesis Statement
   1. Revised Thesis Statement