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please ignore the Third question about replying to classmates post

Also, this question is related to business communications, there was no such option therefore i selected the subject randomly

Read the following poorly written request email, then complete these tasks: 1. List at least five weaknesses. (Review Ch. 5 for proper persuasive techniques and message structure.) 2. Revise the message into a properly organized and structured request email. Remember to use the indirect approach for your message. 3. Post feedback to at least three of your classmates' posts. (There is no deadline to post feedback.) Original message: Mark Hollett and I, along with other Riverfront employee, have been eager to return to college, but we can't afford the costs of tuition and books. Many of us were forced to go to work before we could complete out university degrees. We know that the continuing education divisions of some universities provide good courses that we could take at night. Mark and I - and we think many other employees as well - would like to enroll in these courses. Would Riverfront be interested in helping us with a tuition-reimbursement program? We've heard about other local companies (Worldwide Trust, Dominion Securities, Mid Moutain Group, and others) that offer reimbursement for fees and books when employees complete approved courses with a C or higher. Mark and I have collected information, including a newspaper clipping that we're enclosing. Surveys show that tuition-reimbursement programs help improve employee morale and loyalty. They also result in higher productivity because employees develop improved skills We'd like the chance to talk over this worthwhile employee program with you at your convenience