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Priscilla, good day to you! Because I explained to you in my initial letter that my hope was to be able to come on May 27 and do the walkthrough, and if there was nothing wrong, then on May 31st I will give you the keys and the garage opener and the exchange for my deposit, I wanted to see if I could try one more time to come up with a reasonable accommodation for the both of us. I wanted to make sure that I could try to find a solution that would be acceptable to both of us. It is stated in the lease that it is in an interest-bearing account; therefore, if there is no damage, there is really no need for me to have to wait for the deposit.