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July $18,2024$

To: Honorable Mayor Torres

Greetings Honorable,

I am writing to you, with the greatest of respect, to express my wish. In the past few days it has come to my attention that the HS Buyer position will soon be available. Since my beginnings in the Head Start program, my goal has been to be able to share my knowledge with my colleagues and other departments. My commitment has been genuine and I have demonstrated this over the past years. In $2016$ I started in the stipend program working a minimum of hours and with a prognosis of cancer, which did not stop my strength and desire to raise my family. By this date the family business would have collapsed so generating income was my goal. Saving my home and bringing sustenance home were the main reasons for not giving up$.$ In $2017$ I managed to join the program as a full$-$time receptionist. It didn't start with the arrival of Hurricane Maria, we continue to fulfill and collaborate in our tasks.

The new challenges that this period brought with it gave me the opportunity in $2018$ to serve as assistant to the human resources officer. With the responsibility that characterizes me and the confidentiality of the department, we manage to collaborate in an integral way. As a result of the need that arose in the purchasing department, and Guevara's new professional challenges, I had the opportunity to provide support to this department, thus knowing all its duties and responsibilities. I have provided support and follow$-$up to everything related to both Guevara, current Purchasing Director, and Garcia, current buyer.

Currently I work as a transportation manager, fulfilling our duties. However, having learned of the new opportunity that will be offered in the purchasing department, I wish to express my genuine desire to be considered for this job opportunity. Life's challenges have presented a health condition for my husband, he suffers from Alzheimer's, which presents additional expenses. Knowing the tasks and having the skills to perform it$,$ I genuinely want you to consider me for this position. This would mean an increase to my current salary to be able to meet the obligations and challenges that life presents me again.

Yous truly,

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$($Mrs$.$ Jessica Jones$)$