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Broad Research Topic

Sex workers' experience of sex work

Focus Research Topic

Is sex workers experience like the experience women had in slavery.

The topic of sex work and sex workers being comparable to slavery is relevant because there is a similarity to the effects women experience working in the sex work industry that is comparable to what women have experience in slavery.

I find this comparable topic compelling and important because slavery at one time was a social system in the history of mankind that served as a way of production and economic exploitation. Overtime this social living was deemed not needed and abolished and as our development of human rights and laws of mankind evolved other kinds of production and economic growth were found. By looking at the evolution of slavery we will be able to see the comparative cycle that women experience in slavery and this could lead to education and support for sex workers in the sex work industry.

Research Question

Is the experience of sex work for sex workers like those that women experience in slavery?

Thesis Statement

The hidden effect of slavery that are experience by women in slavery, are those of the same that are experience by women sex workers in the sex work industry.

Paragraph Outline

How will I answer the question that sex workers' experience in the sex industry is like the experience that women in slavery experience.

1^st paragraph - Showing that women are dehumanized to be objects that are sold.

2^nd paragraph - that pregnancies and motherhood are disadvantages and have negative effects or choices these women had to make

3^rd paragraph - The hazards of violence and rape are present in each situation

4^th paragraph - morals and values of society shape the laws that exist today about slavery and sex workers.