I need help with editing an artifact to get my grade up :) I scored low on this and will attach the edits from the teacher. Thank you so much in advance!

THE INSTRUCTIONS:

Face and face management: Analyze face-saving and face loss in one of these clips (best papers will go beyond pos and neg face to consider other terms, for example, shameless/heartless, face threatening acts, and specific strategies for prevention or restoration of face loss by self or others. Use one of these or find your own clip or describe your own example. NOTE: For a good grade, your analysis must go beyond "positive" and "negative" face (concepts introduced in an intro-to-comm-theory course).

THE VIDEO:

Hidden Figures: Katherine apologizes for having to use the restroom: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RzMe4BYwJaM

(Need s to have examples from this exact clip) (nee ds to be face to face theory examples)

ARTIFACT TO EDIT:

Face to Face

Individuals aim to display a particular social identity when interacting with others in various situations. This representation is known as the "face" and incorporates how individuals want to be perceived by others during interactions. A positive face reflects an individual's wish for admiration and respect, whereas negative faces signify independence-seeking behaviors. Positive and negative politeness is utilized by individuals to maintain their positive or negative faces, respectively. Both tactics serve a significant purpose in helping people navigate social interactions with grace and tactfulness without compromising their beliefs. Negativity can often elicit destructive behaviors from others, while positivity is more likely to inspire constructive actions that lead toward the retention of goals. To achieve successful outcomes for all included, we must incorporate both forms of politeness into our daily lives as much as we can. This causes people to feel valued equally regardless of if a disagreement arises between them at any point during a discussion on different topics concerning life.

Hidden Figures is a short clip that displays the ideas of "saving face" and "losing face." In the movie, Katherine experiences an urge to excuse herself for using the bathroom. This lowers her professionalism slightly because it makes her appear less composed than usual occurrences. However, by justifying her conduct while maintaining positivity, she shows how willing she is to maintain good relations and demonstrates proficiency in this skill set in doing so without effort. The investigation considers both positive and negative attitudes and methods used to prevent or recover from any potential damage caused by perceived slights towards our expectations regarding behavior in certain situations. The film, Hidden Figures, portrays a moment where Katherine faces an act that shames her in front of others. While at work, she is placed into a difficult predicament when trying to locate the nearest restroom designated for people of color. The lack of time causes her inconvenience and urgency as she must travel back and forth from another building just to relieve herself. This led to tardiness towards an important assembly waiting for her. This occurrence diminishes more than merely time since it threatens confidence within herself while carrying out duties related to racial prejudice. This is putting her reputation at stake by showing unprofessionalism due to lateness during scheduled meetings which can introduce unfavorable opinions about one's character attributes.

A variety of tactics were utilized by Katherine to prevent further loss of face. She tries to ease the importance of her being late by expressing regret and claiming that she was obligated to journey a far distance to use the restroom, rather than simply mentioning she was using it. The use of figurative language as opposed to being direct is another approach employed "It took me a little longer". This consists of an example where indirect phrasing has been used. In discussion with this method, Katherine reinforces her commitment towards work by highlighting being present and prepared for action; furthermore, justification comes into play with explanation surfacing about how circumstances were beyond control when remarking "couldn't help it.." When an act may threaten one's face, Katherine initiates restorative measures to repair any harm sustained. She voices her remorse and proffers apologies for causing inconvenience through tardiness. Equally, as eye-catching, is her attempt at defending lateness by disclosing that it took a greater distance than anticipated just to access sanitary facilities. Positively restoring confidence in herself could include acknowledging another person's perspective while appreciating their willingness to listen, and adding gratitude will efficiently guarantee this gesture. Completing a turnaround also includes solving concerns raised by volunteering for extra hours on duty as compensation, saving some tension by using the word choice "lost time.". The Hidden Figures scene portrays complex interpersonal communication regarding face and its management. Due to race-based structural inequalities, Katherine experiences a threat to her dignity. However, she adopts numerous approaches for preserving or regaining it in the aftermath of such happenings.

TEACHER GRADING

and prepared for action; furthermore, justification comes into play with explanation surfacing about how circumstances were beyond control when remarking "couldn't help it.." When her remorse and proffers apologies for causing inconvenience through tardiness. Equally as eye catching, is her attempt at defending lateness by disclosing that it took a greater di acknowledging another person's perspective while appreciating their willingness to listen, and adding gratitude will guarantee this gesture in an efficient way. Completing a turnar some tension by using the word choice "lost time.". The Hidden Figures scene portrays complex interpersonal communication regarding face and its management. Due to race-based s preserving or regaining it in the aftermath of such happenings. Artifact Grading Sheet ISUID: 803893675 #3: Face: Hidden Figures GRADE: 19/ 25 This grading sheet contains the general ideas of grading for the 10-point artifact. Final grading will be based on these criteria, as well as an overall assessment of the work. Please keep Criteria Points & Comments CONTENT (summary of text & concepts to be applied): Introduction: A clear introduction to the text (incident, artifact), with summary explanation of what the text (spoken, written) is and the class concept to which it applies. Nice title. Clear explanation of the text/dialogue/ artifact. Coverage of the clip is pretty good, but Appropriateness of artifact for the assignment and for the concepts covered or how K challenges the "face" of other CONCEPTS AND APPLICATION Accurate definition/explanation of course terms in your own words (use of book words, especially without clear citation, will count against you). You can use some quotations, but do NOT define all relevant terms in the words of the sources. In the end, there is no evidenc Clear and explicit application of specific class terms, concepts to the paper (don't just shoot the breeze about some language experience. The assignment is supposed to help you apply but coverage soon after confus class concepts concretely). There is mention of several str Accurate application: Concepts are applied with accuracy strategies. You could even do r Appropriate depth of application: Concepts are applied with appropriate detail or depth to the text. My general electronic grading code: Blue font: writing error (gram Yellow highlight: wording, wo Writing: No part of grading is based on writing, but you will lose points for writing if you have excessive grammar, punctuation, stylistic, or organizational problems Xyz: This means errors inside in your writing. I will bold terms just to track Types of errors in the essay: highlighted Writing: There are not a lot of technica 18/25 might be graceful here... MAJOR WRITING CONSIDERATIONS Major structural concerns: run-ons (comma splices ) , fragments Words missing/extra words that are not needed (that make grammar incorrect) Verb tense ?? (present/past confusion; past/present perfect confusion; past perfect confusion) Subject/verb agreement Spellingnces were beyond control when remarking "couldn't help it.." When an act may threaten one's face, Katherine initiates restorative measures to repair any harm sustained. She voices tempt at defending lateness by disclosing that it took a greater distance than anticipated just to access sanitary facilities. Positively restoring confidence in herself could include will guarantee this gesture in an efficient way. Completing a turnaround also includes solving concerns raised by volunteering for extra hours on duty as compensation, saving munication regarding face and its management. Due to race-based structural inequalities, Katherine experiences a threat to her dignity. However, she adopts numerous approaches for Artifact Grading Sheet e criteria, as well as an overall assessment of the work. Please keep all of your artifacts until the end of the semester. Points & Comments 9/ 10 pts concept to which it applies. Nice title. Coverage of the clip is pretty good, but there is more to be done with this clip. For example, the description says nothing about what the boss says to her (in front of everyone), or how K challenges the "face" of others in the department. Some of the claims (e.g., about a "justification" or an "apology" need more specific detail from the clip. you). You can use some quotations, but do 11/ 15 pts In the end, there is no evidence from the essay that you used the required reading. There are some good defs up front (that you could have gotten from an online site), assignment is supposed to help you apply but coverage soon after confuses pos and neg face with positivity and negativity, and then with having or lacking confidence. There is mention of several strategies for communication, but they show little connection to ideas from the reading about specific face-saving or face-restoring strategies. You could even do more with positive and negative face of Katherine and of others in the scene. -1 pt My general electronic grading code: Blue font: writing error (grammar, punct, spelling) Yellow highlight: wording, word choice , stylistic, or organizational problems Xyz: This means errors inside of other errors I will bold terms just to track them as I read Types of errors in the essay: highlighted below Writing: There are not a lot of technical "errors, " but the writing lacks clarity at enough places that it works against the overall quality of the essay. 18/25 might be graceful here...MAJOR WRITING CONSIDERATIONS Major structural concerns: run-ons (comma splices ) , fragments Words missing/extra words that are not needed (that make grammar incorrect) Verb tense ?? (present/past confusion; past/present perfect confusion; past perfect confusion) Subject/verb agreement Spelling LESSER WRITING CONSIDERATIONS Pronoun case (whom/who; I/me/myself, etc.) Misplaced (dangling) modifiers (m.m.) List structure (parallel expression) Change in number (singular/plural)JOR WRITING CONSIDERATIONS or structural concerns: ran-one (comma splices ) , fragments Words missing/extra words that are not needed (that make grammar incorrect) Verb tense ?? (present/past confusion; past'present perfect confusion; past perfect confusion) Subject/verb agreement Spelling LESSER WRITING CONSIDERATIONS Pronoun case (whom/who; lime'myself, etc.) ed (dangling) modifiers (m.m.) List structure (parallel expression) Change in number (singalsoplural) PUNCTUATION Comma usage: #1 compound sentence, #2 initial clauses, #3 nonessential/monrestrictive clauses; #4 essential/restrictive clauses; #5 lists and Oxford comma; no coordinate adjectives; #7 contrasted coord eleme verb [or verb/object]: #13 NOT with compound predicates; #14 NOT in compound subject or object; #15: NOT before dep clause at end of sentence; unneeded commas; commas with direct address Apostrophes: confusing plurals with possessives, singular with plural possessives Other punctuation; terminal punctuation; quotation marks, hyphens/dashes; ;/, confusion; lack of spaces before ( or . >/: confusion; paragraph indents, titles of longer works Capitalization STYLE/ORGANIZATION/FORMAT Word choice (we) wording difficulties, lack of clanty; inappropriate use of article, vague pronouns or references Style: too informal (contractions, 2 person, colloquialisms), verb-tense inconsistency; singular nouns with plural pronouns; confusion of "person" (16, 20, 3). I accept 2old person (you) in "informal" papers, but Wordiness, use of unnecessary words, passive voice, unneeded com and verb tenses, redundancy Format: Citation; references; Oxford comma, paragraph spacing, headings, Black/White, number format Lack of Title (Not required "go beyond "Artifact I" to make title descriptive of co Intro to essay: Do not start essay with something like, "My application paper is about," or "I decided to do my paper on... Organization: General flow of ideas between sections, within sections; clear use of "thesis" sentences in paragraphs; cohesion of ideas. Break essay into Format for submission: UID (not name) on paper; UID in docum cument title: word compatible (not PDF)