I recently wrote a rough draft on a business proposal of implementing a paper recycling program in the office. Here the feedback I got from my professor that I need to work on and personalize the subject:

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Initiating a recycling proposal in your office is appealing: it solves a problem, of course. But also you can pull from your specific expertise$$what sort of cultural concerns and barriers and personalities and resources are limiting here and must be overcome? What is the best path to make this change$$at your office. The bloggy is somewhat general $($we could imagine anyone, anywhere offering these general considerations$).$ As you head toward the rough draft, you can draw on your specific expertise on conditions at your office: who should do what with which resources and how?

Your bloggy already considers pertinent resources to address: materials, locations, processes, personnel. What elements with what detail will it take to persuade your audience to adopt your new recycling program? What counterarguments to such a program do you have to anticipate $($messiness$,$ new bins cluttering up the hallways or the breakroom, etc.$).$