integrate these notes to my original essay to make it better:

talk about how listening to the opera and the singers, story reminded you of your Persian heritage

include what graded me to this point of being amazed by opera and how I found it similar to Persian poetry, to my Persian background. Connected with my background in Persian story telling, drew me in, made a connection.

How that made me invest in practicing opera and how much I practiced

Lyrical writer catches me up and out of where I am. The opera transported me to my Persian background, and the love for....

Persian language with Persian rischness tapped into that, too express the feelings that I had through music rather than poetry

showing more than telling

Showing: what I felt at the time when I heard it.

Realized the love I had person poetry can transfer itself to singing and performance

Also Intregrate Something like this, but probably shorter: "The Persian language with its poetic richness, a cornerstone of my upbringing, that fostered my deep appreciation for literature and storytelling. My early exposure to the art of storytelling through poetry naturally extended to my passion for singing opera. Much like Persian poetry, opera is a medium that thrives on conveying complex emotions and narratives through music and performance. By channeling my poetic feelings into the characters I portray in classical opera, I find a unique way to merge my cultural heritage with my artistic expression."

Original essay: My greatest talent is my ability to sing opera, a skill that I have honed through years of dedicated practice and a deep passion for the art form. My journey into the world of opera started at age 14 when I went to see Giuseppe Verdi's "Aida" at the Seattle Opera. The aria that moved me the most was ," The opera singers voice soared effortlessly, conveying a depth of emotion that resonated deeply within me.) (what did it feel like) (simile or metaphor)- almost float.) (depth of emotion, raw) (cathartic) (rawness of ) the tenor's voice soared effortlessly in the aria, transporting me in the raw depth of emotion he conveyed. The beauty and complexity of this piece inspired me to the point I knew I would convince my mom to find a voice coach so I could express this depth of emotion. I was mesmerized by the way the music could tell a story and evoke such powerful feelings. Two weeks later, I stood in the studio of my first vocal teacher, ready to immerse myself in the study of opera. I practiced everyday, focusing on mastering the intricate techniques required to perform operatic pieces. This included breath control, vocal range expansion, and the ability to convey deep emotions through my voice. I believe my dedication to constant improvement was fueled by my love for the art form and my desire to share its beauty with others.

My perseverance paid off when I was given the opportunity to participate in Seattle Opera Productions. Being cast in a main role was a dream come true and a testament to the progress I had made. Each performance was a chance to bring the characters to life, to share the emotional depth of the stories we told, and to move and inspire listeners.