Part $1$: Analyse

Let$$s do some analyse. Take a look at the memo. Analyse its style and tone.

Answer the following in your analyse:

$$ How does the writer come across?

$$ What action does the writer expect from the reader?

$$ Is the writer using passive or active voice?

Answer Part $1$ :

Part $2$: Rewrite

Rewrite the below memo.

$($Some tips to keep in mind for your rewrite: Do you think the tone the writer is displaying is appropriate for this type of message? Does the writer start by stating their purpose and do they end by providing their audience a takeaway? What is the writer asking and is this made clear? Is the grammar correct? Hint, hint, first sentence may be a run$-$on$,$ try to make it more concise.$)$

The memo

To: Zoe Watts, Personnel Manager

From: William Butterworth, Health and Safety Manager

Date: November $12,2019$

Subject: Application of Ergonomic Principles to Computer Workstations

Use the attached booklet entitled Guide for Computer Workstation Ergonomics and send this to all senior managers and purchasing agents who may influence the purchase and installation of computer equipment in Bigco urging them to pay attention to the following aspects: selection, purchase, and installation of this type of equipment in the future. Your suggestions as to the most appropriate procedure and list of recipients are required.