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Email: TO: FROM: SUBJECT: Hi all! All Employees <allemployees@datatech.com> Stephanie Campbell <scampbell@datatech.com> Parking Violations! Parking here at DataTech is free unless you don't follow the parking guidelines, and then you get ticketed. Because you aren't following the policies, we knew it was time to send this reminder. Day-shift employees should park in Lots A and B in their assigned spaces. They will be ticketed if they don't register their cars. Everyone needs to display the white parking stickers on their cars. Remember that it's a MAJOR violation if you park at the curb before 3:30 p.m. because that area is for visitors and swing-shift employees. Understand? Swing-shift employees may park in any empty space after 3:30 p.m. They have the option to park at the curb before 3:30 p.m. However, don't park in curb spaces marked for handicapped, van pool, or car pool vehicles, which many of you have been doing. All employees must register their cars and display a parking sticker. These white registration stickers should be placed on your back bumper on the driver's side. Pick them up in the Human Resources Division from 8 a.m. to 5 p.m. on weekdays. But to make it convenient for you, they will be in the cafeteria on September 10 from 11:30 a.m. to 1:30 p.m. and from 3 to 5 p.m. We're really trying our best not to issue tickets, but people keep violating the rules. You can help by following these suggestions, or else face the consequences. That's it, Steph Campbell Email: TO: FROM: SUBJECT: Hi all! All Employees <allemployees@datatech.com> Stephanie Campbell <scampbell@datatech.com> Parking Violations! Parking here at DataTech is free unless you don't follow the parking guidelines, and then you get ticketed. Because you aren't following the policies, we knew it was time to send this reminder. Day-shift employees should park in Lots A and B in their assigned spaces. They will be ticketed if they don't register their cars. Everyone needs to display the white parking stickers on their cars. Remember that it's a MAJOR violation if you park at the curb before 3:30 p.m. because that area is for visitors and swing-shift employees. Understand? Swing-shift employees may park in any empty space after 3:30 p.m. They have the option to park at the curb before 3:30 p.m. However, don't park in curb spaces marked for handicapped, van pool, or car pool vehicles, which many of you have been doing. All employees must register their cars and display a parking sticker. These white registration stickers should be placed on your back bumper on the driver's side. Pick them up in the Human Resources Division from 8 a.m. to 5 p.m. on weekdays. But to make it convenient for you, they will be in the cafeteria on September 10 from 11:30 a.m. to 1:30 p.m. and from 3 to 5 p.m. We're really trying our best not to issue tickets, but people keep violating the rules. You can help by following these suggestions, or else face the consequences. That's it, Steph Campbell

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