Scenario $1-$

You received a $5/100$ on an assignment and are upset and confused by this mark. You draft an email to your professor and show it to your friend before you hit $$send$.$ Your friend replies $$Woah$,$ you$$re going to send that?$$ After your friend leaves, you decide to revise it before sending.

Here is the email you drafted:

$$Hi$.$ Why is my mark $5/100?$ I put a lot of work into this assignment and there is no way that I deserve only a $5/100.$ I don$$t know if you think I cheated, but I didn$$t$.$ If you don$$t change my mark I am going to email the president of the college. I can$$t believe you want me to fail.

I demand to re$-$write the assignment right away.

Thanks.$$

Reflecting on your knowledge of audience, purpose, and tone, revise your email. Be sure your purpose is clear and that you use a tone and vocabulary that will help you achieve your goals.

Answer the following $3$ questions before writing your revision.

$1.$ Consider the audience and purpose. Who is this for, and what are you trying to achieve?

a$.$ Who is the audience? $($Choose one$)$

o The professor

o The President of the college

o A fellow student

b$.$ What is the purpose? $($Choose one$)$

o Express anger

o Request a re$-$write

o Request a meeting or more feedback

$2.$ Consider the tone of the communication.

a$.$ Why is the current tone of the email inappropriate? $(1-2$ sentences$)$

b$.$ What would be an appropriate tone for this email? $(1-2$ sentences$)$

$3.$ Identify $3$ specific things that are wrong with this communication based on the intended audience, purpose and tone?

$4.$ Now, write your revised email below: