While this is a humorous example, there are certainly aspects that could be improved. If you were editing the proposal prior to sending it to the director of the NSA, how would you provide feedback to Sanford Kelson? Remember the revision stages necessary. Focus primarily on the $$editing$$ items needed, rather than the $$proofreading$$ tasks needed. At this point, you should focus on content, style, and order. Revise this informal proposal.