1) Revision (25%) The following has problems with reader access, this includes organization, paragraphing, headings, lists, etc. as well as style and tone. It is too wordy, too repetitive, unclear in its overall message, and it does not consider its audience. There is also numerous grammar issues. Revise, making use of what we have covered in this class and your Business Comms textbook. Please make sure you revise the document to read clearly and concisely, while not omitting any important information. Do no worry about including the address block or using a subject line for this one, just focus on the rewrite. Dear We have been inundated with requests for information from investors, businesses, manufacturers and the public about Bombardier's plans to produce the new Sonic Swift high- speed jet since our announcement of this revolutionary design, which results from hundreds of hours of research into the bright future of commercial air travel. So please forgive for responding to you with a form letter, as we cannot respond effectively to each and every individual who has written to us with an inquiry. The new jets will take off and land safely on shorter runways, fit comfortably with smaller terminals and taxi-ways and fly much longer ranges. For every 4,825 km flown, they will shave off one hour of traditional flying time because they travel at Mach 0.95 (which is actually 20 percent faster than a 747). The new jets will cost airlines less to operate because of reduced flying time, and those savings may be reflected in your ticket prices, and the new jets will offer consumers faster transport to their destination, featuring a sleek, delta-wing style, and they will be available in 2010. For the first time, Bombardier's manufacturing division will use outside suppliers for basic parts, so that our engineers can focus their expertise on the sophisticated systems required by the Sonic Swift. We're very excited about this new efficiency. We expect to reap many benefits from it as Bombardier continues to meet the future needs of air travellers train travellers carriers and the many communities we serve. Bombardier envisions that municipalities will be building many more smaller, suburban airports to overcome the traffic congestion now so dramatically clogging major airport hubs, both in the air and on the ground. To aid in this positive development, we have designed our new Sonic Swift. Sincerely