$1.$ Study the following poorly written e$-$mail message. Then make revisions to correct the email. To help with your revision, be sure to check for each of the following items. If you do not understand one of these items, please email me for help:

vague expressions,

long lead$-$ins,

there is$/$there are fillers,

trite $($overused$,$ unoriginal$)$ business expressions,

clich$$s$,$ buried verbs,

lack of parallelism,

lack of plain English,

and other problems.

$2.$ Please copy and paste the following email into a Word document. Make the necessary changes, and save your work. Name the file: First Last name$\_$E$-$Mail Rewrite. Then, upload your document into this assignment submission. Please let me know if you have questions while you work on it$!$

Below is the email to copy and paste into your new Word document:

To: Roger M$.$ Karjala

From: Keiko Kurtz

Subject: One Way to Improve Customer Relations

Mr$.$ Karjala,

Because of the fact that you asked for suggestions on how to improve customer relations, I am submitting my idea. I am writing you this message to let you know that I think we can improve customer satisfaction easy by making a change in our counters.

Last December glass barriers were installed at our branch. There are tellers on one side and customers on the other. The barriers have air vents to be able to allow us tellers to carry on communication with our customers. Management thought that these barriers that are bullet proof would prevent and stop thieves from catapulting over the counter.

However there were customers who were surprised by these large glass partitions. Communication through them is really extremely difficult and hard. Both the customer and the teller have to raise their voices to be heard. It's even more of an inconvenience when you are dealing with a person that is elderly or someone who happens to be from another country. Beyond a shadow of a doubt, these new barriers make customers feel that they are being treated impersonally.

I did research into the matter of these barriers and made the discovery that we are the only bank in town with them. There are many other banks that are trying casual kiosks and open counters to make customers feel that they are more at home.

it may be easier said than done, I suggest that we actually give serious consideration to the removal of these barriers as a beginning and initial step toward improving customer relations.

Keiko Kurtz

E$-$mail: k$.$kurtz@firstbank.com

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