ADD first aid list to appendix $($but reference it$!)$

give a small intro about safety or connect this to what things you will provide.

MOVE the participant intake form and incident forms to the appendix $($referenced within the document$)$

Privacy info needs to be more robust. Look for examples.

Emergency contacts $-$ you need to add them, and they need to be specific

what are the key numbers $(911,$ police, wildfire$)+$ Search and rescue if applicable for example

present as a table

key contacts in each community for each location you will visit are also needed

Example $-$ how do you reach the coast guard?

ADD communications info as per the example of a critical incident protocol

Explain why you have this$/$purpose

we will practice some of the key message pieces so that will help.

ADD Emergency equipment $-$ add a short intro to the list $+$ tell me why you have this info.

Review the overall flow of the document $($this is choppy!$)$

it does not flow

is there depth in your analysis