COMM 1103 Assignment #1 (15%) There are 2 sections to the test. Section 1 is proofreading. Section 2 is organizing and editing messages. You have 75 minutes for this assignment. Submit your finished assignment to the folder on the Hub. NB: The assignment folder will close at 4 p.m. You will not be able to submit any work after that time. General rules: you are allowed to use online editors, including Grammarly. You may also use a dictionary and Thesaurus. You cannot use any device or access any prewritten content or work with others. In other words, you can get online help editing your work but you cannot get help writing your work. Section 1: Proofreading (10 marks) Rewrite the sentences below accurately. Your goal is to correct the errors. Any errors in your answers will result in lost marks. Half marks will be given. 1. My bother and myself plan to enroll for an english class. 2. Mike fell he did good on the exam but he don't get the score he need for his program, hell need to do it again next fall 3. We examined all simular account on a cse-by-case bases. 4. This report will discuss the technology impact on the society. 5. To speed up the settlement of the soft Clay, engineers used a method called The Sand Drain, as show on figure 3. 2. Mike fell he did good on the exam but he don't get the score he need for his program, hell need to do it again next fall 3. We examined all simular account on a cse-by-case bases. 4. This report will discuss the technology impact on the society. 5. To speed up the settlement of the soft Clay, engineers used a method called The Sand Drain, as show on figure 3. 6. To manufacturing a plastic bag is required approximately 6 lbs of CO2. 7. This report will detail, the benefit of a green roof. 8. The industry is compelled to conduct researches. 9. Soils placed on green roofs has additional weight, therefore buildings must be reinforced to sustain the increased load. 10. I did the research and asked a lot of people weather the job they are doing now is there dream job. Insert Section 2: Organizing and editing emails (10 marks) Rewrite the email below according to the following instructions: 1. Rewrite the subject line so it meets the criteria discussed in week 2. 2. Divide the email into short paragraphs (in this case a list is NOT a paragraph!) 3. Make one parallel list using the text. 4. One of the first 2 sentences is unnecessary. Which one? Delete the unnecessary sentence 5. Rewrite the opening paragraph, making it 2 sentences long. 6. The underlined sentences are not written in a technical style. Edit them for style. There are no language errors, just problems in style. You may delete information you feel is unnecessary. 7. Revise the email for word choice. In numerous places, the writer has chosen vocabulary that is incorrect or in appropriate. Find and fix a minimum of 4. Subject: Conference Dear Vice President Hope you are doing well. The International Society for Professional Improvement's annual conference is next month. This year's conference is called Building on our Strengths, and focuses on employee motivation and performance maximization. I'm requesting six days' leave and $2759 in Professional Development (PD) funding to attend. This wonderful and amazing spectacle will be held from August 19th to August 22nd in the often forgotten but welcoming city of Fredericton, New Brunswick. You can next month. This year's conference is called Building on our Strengths and focuses on employee motivation and performance maximization. I'm requesting six days' leave and $2759 in Professional Development (PD) funding to attend. This wonderful and amazing spectacle will be held from August 19th to August 22nd in the often-forgotten but welcoming city of Fredericton, New Brunswick. You can uncover more data about the conference by perusing The International Society for Professional Improvement's website here. I feel it's fair to warn you that it's a terrible website. $2759 from the staff PD pile is needed for me to head over there. The cost breaks down is as follows: $599 for the conference price, $1000 for board ($200ight), airfare costs $1010 and supplies will be $150. Please let me know if my request to attend has been okayed by September 306, so I have time to order my flight and hotel. I figure that because we already talked about this, you'll have no problems with me asking for this. Thank you, Jane Doe Training Manager Some Branch of Some Bank 999-999.999 ext. 999 jdoe@somebank.com