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The following external persuasive message is sent to local business owners from the chamber of commerce. The goal of the message is to persuade business owners to donate their time and expertise to a career day for $6-$ through $12-$grade students in the local school district. This message does not employ a professional tone and is unclear. Additionally, the message contains several verb errors $($tense and passive voice$),$ number usage errors, grammatical errors, spelling errors, sentence errors $($run$-$on$,$ comma splices, etc.$),$ and style errors.

Greater Area Chamber of Commerce

$6589$ Business Blvd$.$

Littleton, NC $27850$

February $16,2018$

RE: Career Day

Dear Valued Local Business Owner:

Each year the Greater Area Chamber of Commerce organizing a career day for the local schools. This years career day will take place on $4/10$ @ $11$ A$.$M$.$ to $2$ P$.$M$..$ Career day an exciting oportunity for you to teach sixth through $12$th graders about owning businesses. As an important part of our community, we are reaching out to you today and we would like you to be a part of this important community day.

This years career day consists of booths presentations. Students are having the opportunities to speak with business owners $1-$on$-1$ at they$$re booths after hearing they$$re formal presentations. The presentation should consist of ten too twelve mins. to provide an overview of your business and how you became a business owner. Make sure to tell stories the students will enjoy, like your future vision.

We hope that you will consider being a part of this exciting opportunity. Respond no later than the first day of March to donate your time. We look forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely,

Amelia Blue

Director

Greater Area Chamber of Commerce