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Sidebar Interview

 

The director of operations at an animal shelter located in Junction city speaks out against animal cruelty in large breeding facilities on Thursday.

 

When asked about the details behind infamous breeding facilities, Vanessa Gray, who is incharge of the entire shelter and is an animal enthusiast said "Such facilities are very detrimental because there is not a lot of breed testing, temperament testing and genetic testing involved". Gray further added that "it is a recipe for disaster because most puppies shipped out to other states from these facilities are not usually vaccinated, and their health status is always questionable". 

 

I asked Gray if she ever had to look into claims of animal abuse and if it was particularly challenging for her to manage. Gray stated "The investigation portion is done by the law enforcement however, I have been on the scene where there was a hoarding situation with 45 dogs living in questionable conditions and all had ring worms. I have also seen intense cruelty cases where once an owner ripped his 3-month puppy's jaw apart with his own hands." Gray also added,  "I think I will never forget this incident because every dog deserves a loving home."

 

I then asked Gray what her views were regarding purchasing puppies from private stores such as petland and similar privately owned facilities. Gray sighed in opposition and stated "I am against it because these stores are notorious for getting their pets from puppy mills and the health testing does not seem to play a role. She continued, "I previously adopted a dog from a facebook group who was originally from Petland and at 6-months-old, he already had dual hip dysplasia. To the point that he is now 4-years-old and has such a terrible time getting around since there was absolutely no testing done."

 

I understand that animals who experience poor treatment from a young age may experience social, emotional, and even physical problems which led me to ask my next question. I asked Gray, what makes shelter dogs different from breeding dogs? To which she responded "Their stories. The way shelter dogs separate themselves is because they have a story worth telling." Gray also emphasized that, sometimes the owners have no other choice but to surrender their loving pets to shelters due to excruciating circumstances. "We try to do the absolutely best things for our animals but an animal shelter setting is not an ideal place for an animal to live" added Gray. 

Gray noted that since covid, a lot more people are attempting to breed. "It's a harsh truth that we are finding out that covid has gotten a lot of people into buying pets with money. People have started to breed their dogs whether they are purebred or not, tested or not. We are seeing this trend with poodles for potential hypoallergenicity but they are breeding doodles with double-coated dogs and 9 times out of 10, they are not hypoallergenic." concluded Gray. 

I asked my last question on what someone should do if they saw an animal being mistreated to end the interview. Gray said, "A lot of people want to be hands on and do something in the moment, but law enforcement can't do what they have to when the person reporting gets involved. She continued, "Let's say for example you notice a dog that's without water and you want to complain that, Oh! These people are not giving their dog water so you go give the dog water and call the police. When the animal control or police arrive, there is water present. We ended the interview with Gray's final remarks, "Definitely leave it up to the professionals to deal. Unfortunately, there are a lot of areas where animal control doesn't exist and law enforcement is not too familiar with the animal laws. Please leave it up to the law enforcement to make sure that our fur babies are well taken care of." 

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