Proofreading and Revising Exercise Instructions. For each item below, determine whether the sentence contains errors. If a sentence contains no errors, then do nothing to it. If a sentence contains an error, correct the error. Conciseness (long lead-ins, redundancies, clichs, noun conversions, needless repetition, and other wordy constructions) 1. Our employees are of the opinion that our health-insurance package is too expensive. 2. The dirt on our delivery truck is visible to the naked eye. 3. Our rules and regulations lack clarity about overtime pay. 4. I am writing this report to let you know what I learned during my recent trip to Arkansas. 5. An examination of our records indicates that you owe last month's rent. 6. I am responsible for training new employees. 7. Each and every one of the runners donated money to charity. 8. This is to inform you that readers prefer concise sentences. 9. In spite of the fact that we experienced negative revenue growth last quarter, investors remain optimistic about the future. Parallel Construction (From Towson State University) 1. It is easier to tell the truth than lying to the people you love. 2. For her birthday, Marsha received a cake, some clothes, and she got a new CD player. 3. Jim wanted to scare us by telling us a ghost story and he showed us a horror movie. 4. The witness described the suspect as tall, light-skinned, and with a beard. 5. Spending the day with you is better than if we are apart