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Document for Analysis: Request Refusal -- Bitter Taste of the Beach

The following blunt refusal from a restaurant owner rejects a previously agreed-to favor. To avoid endangering a friendship and losing community goodwill, the writer needs to revise this message.

Analyze the message and list at least four weaknesses. Revise the email. Look at the grading rubric below before you write, for guidance.

Current date

Ms. Diane Hinchcliffe

Taste of the Beach

310 Ocean Avenue, Suite 304

Carmel-by-the-Sea, CA 93521

Dear Ms. Hinchcliffe:

Unfortunately, we cannot participate in this summers Taste of the Beach event. This may be particularly disappointing to you because, merely as a friendly gesture, I had earlier agreed to provide a selection of tasty hors doeuvres from my restaurant, The Zodiac. Im sorry to let you down like this. We have participated in the past, but we just cant do it this year because our aging kitchen facilities require major and extensive remodeling.

I heard that this years Taste of the Beach is really going to be a blast with new and old food, wine, music, and artistic offerings. How did you get so many prized vintners and all those well-known chefs, artists, and music groups to participate and perform?

This is probably quite disappointing to you (and to me) because the event supports Big Brothers Big Sisters of America. I know that BBBSA is simply the very best as a youth mentoring organization.

Let me repeatIm sorry we cant participate. Dont bother to beg me. But for your silent raffle we can offer you a coupon for a dinner for two. Of course, this could not be used until October when our renovations are completed.

Sincerely,