SECTION A: GOODWILL (30 MARKS)

Rewrite the following text using the correct tone and style to create goodwill.

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Dear Ms Ong Sue Min

We have finally assessed your application to Taylors University for graduate studies. This year, the competition was fierce due to the enormous number of applicants, but fortunately, we have recommended your admittance.

In addition, in order to keep our students satisfied, we were fortunate enough to offer a 20-hour-per-week teaching fellowship. This assistantship also includes a one-year tuition waiver. However, if you perform poorly, the fellowship will automatically be terminated.

It seemed to us that you likely lack sufficient information to make an informed conclusion. Therefore, the included brochure provides a comprehensive summary of our Master's in Business Analytics program, including its curriculum, degree requirements, mentorship programme, faculty research interests, and laboratory facilities.

Please notify me in writing of your decision to accept or decline admission as soon as possible, as there are other qualified applicants on the waiting list.

Faculty of Business & Law Admissions Office