1. Summarize the writer's main idea, in your own words.
2. Does the introduction establish a clear starting point for the essay? Does it provide enough background information? Does it end with a thesis? Offer any suggestions you have for improving the intro. [If the draft doesn't have an intro, write "No intro"].
3. Are there paragraphs that seem less coherent or less convincing than others? If so, choose one and explain how it might be better clarified/supported. [Consider the paragraph structure: topic sentence, introduction to the evidence, evidence, analysis, discussion, trans ition]
4. Does the writer discuss multiple articles in their body paragraphs throughout? If not, offer suggestions for connections that can be made between texts.
5. How does the draft hold together? Which paragraphs don't connect well with the preceding or subsequent ones?
6. Is the conclusion merely repetitive, or does it synthesize ideas and suggest new directions of thought? [If the draft doesn't have a conclusion, write "No conclusion"].

7. Identify at least one strength of the writer's essay. 8. Identify at least one area that the writer can improve on. Family violence is an issue of most significant concern that occurs within intimate relationships, where one partner engages in a series of abusive behaviors to gain or maintain control over the other person. The pattern of abuse can take various forms, including physical violence, emotional maltreatment, intimidation, and force. It can affect not just spouses and partners but also family members and other individuals sharing a household. Victims' safety and well-being are most important, and it is crucial to provide vigilant care and intervention. Ensuring the safety and well-being of victims is the principal duty, and vigilant care and intervention are required. Significantly, the consequence of violence extends to children within these environments. The manifestations of domestic violence can vary, encompassing physical, emotional, and sexual abuse, as well as destruction or abuse of property. Family violence has a devastating impact on individuals and society. It causes physical and psychological harm, perpetuates abusive patterns, and undermines positive family dynamics. Violence within a family can have significant and lasting psychological impacts on those who experience or witness it. Individuals who are exposed to family violence may suffer from adverse effects on their mental health and general well-being. Coker et al. (2002) stated that "Exposure to violence within the family can lead to a range of psychological effects such as anxiety, depression, post-traumatic stress disorder, and low self-esteem. These consequences can last into adulthood and impact various aspects of an individual's life, including their relationships, work, and overall well-being." When children or adults witness violence in their families, it can have a profound impact on their physical and psychological well-being. Exposure to violence can lead to a range of physical health problems, including chronic pain, sleep disturbances, and even cardiovascular disease. Additionally, Norman et al. (2012) have stated that "Physical injuries and, in extreme cases, death are direct consequences. World Health Organization (WHO) estimates of child homicide suggest that infants and very young children are at greatest risk, with rates for the age group of 0- to 4 years about double those for 5- to 14-year-olds due to their dependency and vulnerability." In other words, violence within a family has devastating consequences for both children and adults who are witnessing violence. The social effects of violence among family members can be profound and far-reaching. It may result in a collapse of confidence, communication, and relationships within the family unit. Children who witness or experience violence in the home may suffer from emotional trauma, behavioral problems, and long-term psychological issues. The cycle of violence can also continue across generations, normalizing abusive behavior and perpetuating a culture of violence within the family. Norman et al. (2012), "Exposure to violence among family members has been consistently linked to a range of negative social outcomes, including increased aggression, delinquency, and interpersonal difficulties." Research has shown that when individuals are exposed to violence within their families, they are more likely to exhibit negative behaviors. This can be because witnessing violence in the home teaches that aggression is an acceptable way to resolve conflicts. In any case, exposure to violence within the family can have a severe impact on an individual's social and emotional well-being. Furthermore (WHO,2016) stated that" Children exposed to violence and other adversities are more likely to drop out of school, have difficulty finding and keeping a job, and are at heightened risk for later victimization and perpetration of intornorconal and That the text