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To: Bilawal Bhutto

From: Mariam Nawaz

Subject: HELP!

Mr. Bilawal Bhutto:

Our insurance rates will be increased in the near future due to the fact that we dont have security devices on our computer equipment. Local suppliers were considered, but at this point in time none had exactly what we wanted. Thats why I am writing to see whether or not you can provide information and recommendations regarding equipment to prevent the possible theft of office computers and printers. In view of the fact that our insurance carrier has set a deadline of April 1, we need fast action.

Our office now has 18 computer workstations along with twelve printers. We need a device that can be used to secure separate computer components to desks or counters. Would you please recommend a device that can secure a workstation consisting of a computer, monitor, and keyboard? We wonder if professionals are needed to install your security devices and to remove them. We are a small company, and we dont have a staff of maintenance people.

One problem is whether the devices can be easily removed when we need to move equipment around. We are, of course, very interested in the price of each device. What about quantity discounts, if you offer them.

Mariam Nawaz