Document for Analysis: Weak E-Mail Message The following e-mail message suffers from a number of weaknesses discussed in this chapter.

Your Task.
Analyze the faults in the message. In teams or in a class discussion, list at least five specific weaknesses. Then, revise to avoid long lead-ins, fillers, redundancies, wordy compound prepositions, verbs converted to nouns, trite expressions, and general wordiness. In this message consider using two bulleted lists and headings to improve readability. Revise at a computer or use standard proofreading marks to show corrections.

TO: LaTasha Mack, Senior Marketing Manager
FROM: Ted Gonzalez, Vice President
DATE: August 16, 2009
SUBJECT: IMPROVING SAFETY AND SECURITY FOR TELECOMMUTERS
This e-mail is to inform you that due to the fact that telecommuting is becoming increasingly popular, your help is needed to develop better safety and security information for your telecommuters. To aid you in educating and training your telecommuters, a complete guide for managers is now available. There are structured agreements that specify space, equipment, and how you should schedule employees. Please discuss the recommendations that follow for a home workspace as well as recommendations for security with any of your staff members who may be making a consideration of telecommuting.