In response to complaints about children’s pools being left at the city dog park, the parks department sent the following email to those who had registered their dogs at the park:

First, critique the email in small groups. Here are some questions to get you started:
1. What are the purposes of this email?
2. How well are these purposes accomplished?
3. What information does the Park Superintendent provide about the policy change? Why do you think the superintendent chose this information?
4. How is the information organized?
5. Where do you see you-attitude and positive tone? Do they contribute to the email’s effectiveness? Why or why not?
After you have answered these questions, revise the email to be more effective. Consider every level of communication and use the tips from this and other relevant chapters.
As your instructor directs, Write an email to your instructor summarizing your group’s discussion, conveying your revisions, and explaining the reasoning behind your revisions.

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Dear Dog Park User, We have received concerns from users in regards to the use of the small pools near the fountains at the Dog Park. The comments include the lack of cleanliness of the pools, overuse of water, the mess made when the pools are emptied, and more impor- tantly the potential for spreading disease. We understand keeping dogs cool during the hot days, but the dog park is not the place for pools. In an effort to keep dogs and their owners safe while at the Dog Park, pools are not allowed at the Dog Park. If you