3. Please rewrite this poorly written email to correct flabby expressions, long lead-ins, there is/are fillers, trite busi- ness expressions, cliches, slang, buried verbs, lack of paralellism, and general wordiness. Improve readability by be- ing concise and utilizing bulleted or numbered points. To: Marcy Love From: Shelton Matthews Subject: Improving Presentation Techniques Cc: : 4 Marcy, I am writing this message because, pursuant to your request, I attended a seminar about the use of PowerPoint in busi- ness presentations. You suggested that there might be tips that I would learn that we could share with other staff mem- bers, many of whom make presentations that almost always include PowerPoint. The speaker, Gary Dixon, made some very good points on the subject of PowerPoint. There were several points of an important nature that are useful in avoiding what he called a "PowerPoint slumber party." Our staff members should give consideration to the following: Create first the message, not the slide. Only after preparing the entire script should you think about how to make an il- lustration of it. You should prepare slides with short lines. Your slides should have only four to six words per line. Short lines act as an encouragement to people to listen to you and not read the slide. Don't put each and everything on the slide. If you put too much on the slide, your audience will be reading Item Cwhile you are still talking about Item A. As a last and final point, she suggested that presenters think in terms of headlines. What is the main point? What does it mean to the audience? Please let me know whether you want me to elaborate and expand on these presentation techniques subsequent to the next staff meeting